Changeling Write-Up

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My main problem with this is the magic, I think changelings should be pretty good at an array of illusionary magic, and be able to learn one or two spells that are mostly dependent on their last(unicorn) disguise. I also think they should have some measure of hypnosis or mind magic that lets them get out of some tough 1 on 1 situations, maybe gives them an idea of how to act in certain situations. oh, and telekinesis. Secondary problem is that I don't think all common changelings need to look the same, some people might want their oc's to be pretty different, that should be left open.

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My main concern is simple: The write up is way too long. It's very expertly written, so much so, that I think there's way too much. I don't think we can fairly expect a new player who wants to play a Changeling having to read this whole thing just to get an idea as to how the race works. The whole thing is a short story in of itself. There's probably a lot of it that could be made brief or cut altogether, rather than explaining anything and everyone anyone could ever want to know about changelings in one write up.